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| 채점 기준 | TR (Task Response) | CC (Coherence and Cohesion) | LR (Lexical Resource) | GRA (Grammatical Range and Accuracy) | Total |
| 점수 | 7 | 7 | 6 | 5 | 6 |
| Comment | 주어진 그래프에서 나타나는 정보를 정확히 파악하고 이를 상세하면서도 이해하기 쉽게 풀어서 설명해주신 좋은 글 작성해주셨습니다. 그렇지만, 문법적으로 어색한 부분 및 문맥상 적절한 어휘의 활용 등에 유의해 주세요. | ||||
The two line charts compare import figures to New Zealand from two different countries, Australia and Japan,
from 1994 to 2004. Units are measured in million NZ$ millions.
| 채점 기준 | TR (Task Response) | CC (Coherence and Cohesion) | LR (Lexical Resource) | GRA (Grammatical Range and Accuracy) | Total |
| 점수 | 6 | 6 | 7 | 6 | 6 |
| Comment | 주어진 그림에서 나타나는 과정을 정확히 파악하고 이를 상세하면서도 이해하기 쉽게 풀어서 설명해주신 좋은 글 작성해주셨습니다. 다만, 표현상 어색한 부분들이 보이고 있으므로 이에 유의해 주시기 바랍니다. | ||||
Overall, there are six main stages in the process, beginning with getting the uranium from underground,
The first three steps involve the collection and
After
| 채점 기준 | TR (Task Response) | CC (Coherence and Cohesion) | LR (Lexical Resource) | GRA (Grammatical Range and Accuracy) | Total |
| 점수 | 6 | 6 | 5 | 6 | 6 |
| Comment | 주어진 그림에서 나타나는 과정을 정확히 파악하고 이를 상세하면서도 이해하기 쉽게 풀어서 설명해주신 좋은 글 작성해주셨습니다. 다만, 표현상 어색한 부분들이 보이고 있으므로 이에 유의해 주시기 바랍니다. | ||||
The bar graph above shows the number of households in the US with respect to
their yearly earnings in the US in 2007, 2011, and 2015.
Overall, in the category of $100,000 or more, it is clear that there were was a growing growth in
number of households in the US, and all different ranges of annual income remained relatively
stable over the 8 year period.
Looking at the bar chart in further detail reveals that in 2007, the number of households
who earn more than $99,999 was the largest, which accounted for about 30 million.
In contrast, the figure for the category of $75,000-$99,999 was just nearly 15 million families,
and it is being the lowest in 2007.
Over the 8-year period, the number of households in the category of $100,000 or more peaked at
33 million in 2015. Meanwhile, the number of families who earned less than $25,000 and
$25000-$49,999 slightly increased by almost 3 and 2 million from 2007 to 2015, respectively.
Approximately, 21 million households in the US made a profit of between $50,000 and $74,999 in 2015.
| 채점 기준 | TR (Task Response) | CC (Coherence and Cohesion) | LR (Lexical Resource) | GRA (Grammatical Range and Accuracy) | Total |
| 점수 | 6 | 6 | 6 | 6 | 6 |
| Comment | 주어진 그림에서 나타나는 과정을 정확히 파악하고 이를 상세하면서도 이해하기 쉽게 풀어서 설명해주신 좋은 글 작성해주셨습니다. 다만, 표현상 어색한 부분들이 보이고 있으므로 이에 유의해 주시기 바랍니다. | ||||
These days, governments are willing to make sugary products more expensive to make people healthier and
prevent many health problems. There are some reasons why I disagree about with this subject judgment.
First of all, it is evident that this is not an appropriate method for the objective. Making sugary products
more expensive would not solve the main problem. Even though government let force people to pay sugar tax,
a lot of people will buy sugary products. This is because people always get used it to changes; for example,
people were shocked when cigarettes got expensive, but it was just a moment. As a result In the end,
the proportion of people those who smoke didn’t decrease at all. Upon looking at the past,
this will cause have the same result.
Last but not least, it is clear that sugary products can often be needed for healthy body.
Although it is true that many foods contain high levels of sugar, but there is no reason to say
sugary products cause many health problems. For instance, those who have diabetes actually need sugary foods
to make keep them healthy. Fruits make people healthier, with many vitamins in it. So when people
get a cold or sick, they eat many fruits to recover their body condition as fast as they can. Moreover,
they are encouraged to consume more sugar. Also Therefore, the purpose claim of the opinion
doesn’t make sense. To add to that, there are also sugar also in various types of fruits.
But I swear that they authorities will not charge sugar tax to on these fruits.
In conclusion, it is notable apparent that there are no reasons to conduct implement this kind of sugar tax method.
There will be better method if we discuss more about it.
| 채점 기준 | TR (Task Response) | CC (Coherence and Cohesion) | LR (Lexical Resource) | GRA (Grammatical Range and Accuracy) | Total |
| 점수 | 7 | 6 | 5 | 6 | 6 |
| Comment | 주어진 제시문의 의도를 정확히 이해하고 이에 성실히 답변해주신 좋은 글 작성해주셨습니다. 해당 주제에 대한 글쓴이의 견해를 뒷받침하는데 있어 신선한 관점으로 근거들을 제시해주신 점은 좋지만, 본론 두번째 근거에서 과일이 당분을 포함하고 있음에도 세금을 부과하지 않을 것이라는 내용이 앞선 부분들과 일관성을 가지는지 검토해 주시기 바라며 문맥상 적절한 어휘의 활용에 유의해 주시기 바랍니다. | ||||
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