■ Directions: You will have 45 minutes to plan and compose a response that presents your perspective on a topic you select. A response on any topic other that then one you select will receive a score of zero. You will have a choice between two Issue topics. Each topic will appear as a brief quotation that states or implies an issue of general interest. You are free to accept, reject, or qualify the claim made in the topic, as long as the ideas you present are clearly relevant to the topic you select. Support your views with reasons and examples drawn from such areas as your reading, experience, observations, or academic studies.
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▶ Topic :
A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter colleage. |
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▶ Your Answer :
The author contends that a nation should require all students to study same national curriculum until they enter college. However, the following essay will argue that this may not always be the case. Admittedly, the author’s assertion that standardization curriculum may be effective might hold true under certain circumstances. For example, uniform and standardized curriculum help students be prepared with adequate knowledge and skills efficiently and effectively. In addition, same national curriculum is standard to compare students and it is more efficient to take assessment. And also, If the curriculum is decentralized, it is possible to discrepancy between region and region, then student might have difficulty when they transfer to another schools. Accordingly, based on the above example, the author’s claim seems plausible to some degree. However, the author’s assertion that standardization always provide benefit for student education may be challenged for the several reasons. National curriculum is uniformity, therefore, it is lack of flexibility and average standard of curriculum is too easy for someone or too difficult for someone. Decentralized curriculum’ advantage is differences, it means that curriculum could be adjustment according to students various interest and could offer diverse education to students. For instance, in South Korea, there are several specialized schools. The purpose of specialized schools is that government grow up elite students to be helpful to the nation in the future. So these schools are focus on student’s specific interests such as language, art and science. In science specialized schools, students can improve their science knowledge due to diverse science curriculum such as physics and chemistry. In the United States, there are similar types of schools called magnet schools. The magnet schools have different curriculum by the class and therefore, students can improve their education skills at their level. For this reasons, the author’s claim does not stand true all the time. In conclusion, based on the aforementioned discourse, the author’s claim has come truth within it; however it is undeniable that it does not always hold true for all situations. |
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I
only examined your second body paragraph. I hope this is helpful.
Reference:
1. However, the author’s assertion that
standardization always provide benefit for student education may be challenged
for the several reasons.
2. National curriculum is uniformity,
therefore, it is lack of flexibility and average standard of curriculum is too
easy for someone or too difficult for someone.
3. Decentralized curriculum’ advantage is
differences, it means that curriculum could be adjustment according to students
various interest and could offer diverse education to students.
4. For instance, in South Korea, there are
several specialized schools.
5. The purpose of specialized schools is that
government grow up elite students to be helpful to the nation in the future.
6. So these schools are focus on student’s
specific interests such as language, art and science.
7. In science specialized schools, students can
improve their science knowledge due to diverse science curriculum such as
physics and chemistry.
8. In the United States, there are similar
types of schools called magnet schools.
9. The magnet schools have different curriculum
by the class and therefore, students can improve their education skills at
their level.
10. For this reasons, the author’s claim does not
stand true all the time.
Comments:
I fail to see
“several challenging reasons” in this paragraph. Instead, I only see the justification that the claim (i.e., benefit) is not true: uniform curriculum
lacks flexibility.
Statement 1
There is no such
assertion; rather, it has an underlying assumption that a uniform curriculum is
beneficial.
Statement 2
Did you mean?
The uniform
curriculum targets a majority, but its lacking flexibility sacrifices the minority.
Statement 3
Did you mean?
A decentralized,
or diversified, curriculum offers a variety that matches students’ varied
interests.
Statements 4–7
Verbose and
ineffective, how about?
Unlike uniform
curriculum schools, science, technology, engineering, and mathematics (STEM)
schools enable students to pursue subjects of their interests, successfully
promoting education with programs that not only fulfill students’ interests but
also motivate them to seek further education.
Statements 8–9
Tangential, not
closely relevant to the discussion—recommends deletion.